Tuesday, December 23, 2008

Deceptive Advertising


Doesn't this chocolate milk look healthy? The word Balance implies there are lots of vitamins and nutrients, and the word Light means it's low in fat and/or calories. You can drink chocolate milk and be healthy!

This milk is so thick and rich that it for a minute I thought I was drinking Hershey's syrup right out of the bottle. Yummmm. I figure it's better than eating regular-fat chocolate ice cream, but probably not by much.

Is there anything you buy that looks deceptively good for you, even though deep down you know it's not?

17 comments:

Janna Qualman said...

Hmm... nothing comes to mind, but that chocolate milk sure looks nummy!

Melanie Avila said...

Janna, it's sooooo good. It literally tastes like the syrup, with a splash of milk. And it's healthy!

spyscribbler said...

Oh, that does look good! I so wish I could drink milk. For me, it's cheese.

Melanie Avila said...

Spy, you poor thing.

Michael said...

Melaniehoo,

Are you still in Mexico? I bet your weather is better than we have here today.

I made cocoa for the first time ever last night. Turned out pretty good.

Melanie Avila said...

Yep, we're still here. I'll change the blog when we leave. :)

Hot cocoa is yummy too!

Michael said...

I read your revised version. There is still one sentence that I stumble with every time I read it. It's this one.

He walked towards the door and looked back as he pulled it open.

Maybe it's because there are three things happening in one sentence? The "pulled it open" part is where I'm having the trouble. It seems isolated somehow. Maybe just leave those three words out? I know you can write it better.

Michael said...

It's me again. Still thinking about that sentence. I think I figured out what else is bothering me about it. I'm wanting his glance back at her to be the last thing, rather than pulling the door open. Just a suggestion.

Michael said...

You're going to think I don't have anything else to do. Not the case, but I wanted to add one other suggestion to enhance the mood of this encounter. They've been inside this cafe or cantina or whatever it is and had a somewhat intimate experience. Now he heads toward the door. When he opens it the street sounds of the rest of the world rush in and the spell is broken. Maybe you could work that in and somehow combine it with her wistful look. Sound is a powerful feature if you can use it.

Okay, I'm done. I won't bother you any more. You be careful down there.

Melanie Avila said...

Michal, thank you for your suggestions. The following line describes the scene outside - I didn't want to insert it into her reaction to him. The kiss is a really common thing so while it has an impact, it's different than if it had happened in the US.

Michael said...

Got it. I'll just go back to writing about pantyhose and the complex aparatus that preceded them.

Melanie Avila said...

Michael, I wasn't being dismissive of you. I appreciate any comments and suggestions people have for my writing and think everyone's entitled to their opinion.

Michael said...

I may have unintentionally given you the wrong impression by my last comment. I wasn't offended by your reply at all.

Turkey Lurkey said...

Its all good for me!!! (And I refuse to believe otherwise!)

ac said...

Canned soup.

Melanie Avila said...

Turkey, I think that's a good way to look at it. :P

Melanie Avila said...

AC, LOL!